In the past few years, MassMutual has experienced several hard-hitting events that have tested our strength as a company, such as a market collapse, a financial recession, and increasing pressure from our competitors. These hardships MassMutual has had to face has only made us a stronger company in the end.
MassMutual is a mutually owned company which gives us an advantage over many of our competitors in the insurance industry and makes us less vulnerable to market fluctuations. We have stayed true to our ourselves and our company by continuing to provide excellent products, services, and support to our customers.
Our employees are what make us a great company and MassMutual has great employees who go above and beyond their job description and make sure the company will come out of any hardship on top. For this, we thank each and every one of you. By working together and for a universal goal, we can maintain our financial strength and steady growth that MassMutual is known for.
Kelly, you captured the basic market forces facing your company and identified employee commitment as the key to steady results going into the future. Tighten up your grammar. You used many prepositional phrases and past tense verbs. I came away informed, but not inspired. As you complete your 56 remaining books, note how the authors use active verbs and simple sentences to draw you into the story.
ReplyDeleteKelly - I think you did a great job summarizing the market forces currently impacting your company. I enjoyed the honesty, concision and sincerity evident in your posting. As an employee, I would imagine your message would contribute to market-based strategic communication methods contemplated by D'Aprix.
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